Time goes by, I have been in International Software School of Wuhan University for my college for some days. My dream is to be a good programmer, a software architect, even aa boss of a IT company. I know it is so important to learn English for my major, for I will always have much time reading English articles, and may go to foreign countries for further study.
In high school, I have learned much English knowledge. In my opinion, I am not to study only the grammer or the word.
As for my expectation for this term, I select a word called ENJOY. So I plan to learn more than English itself. English culture, knowledge written in English language, and even everything else in English, will be my expectation.
With my growing up, I have realized that to learn is not only to get the knowledge, but also to gain the feeling of culture. I remember,when I study Chinese, I usually want to get the cultural background of the text. I also want to learn more about English culture in my subject. For this reason, I will read much more.
I want to start my morning-reading. I can not wait to sit in the picturesque university, reading aloud, making myself fly to the western countries. Enjoy the sunshine, the article, the happiness of learning English, and make a beautiful trip to everywhere in the world. How eagerly I expect it!
Read more, do more morning-reading, and listen more. I believe I will gain my sense of English which is my biggest target in this term. I will also know more about English culture.
(IT IS MY HOMEWORK FOR COLLEGE ENGLISH, EDITED WITH NAL’S HELP. THANKS)
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software architect!
怎麼了
是不是修改過，好像原來拼錯了。是我看錯了？
是的修改過了，修改的地方請參看你下面的評論。
你原來拼的是software architec。
是的。
check your grammar, buddy.
please tell the detail, thanks
1. expect for -> expectation of
2. in [the] new term
3. 連接兩個獨立的句子不應用”and”。”and”
4. “I have been in ISS of …. for my college. ” 你用現在完成時是要表達『已經有一段時間了』嗎？讀着好彆扭。
5. a good progra[m]mer
6. architec[t], 軟件工程師正規的說法是：software engineer
7. a[n] IT company
8. “good”, “boss” …推薦換用其它詞彙： “professional”, “CEO” etc.
9. major已可以代表專業，”subject”刪。
10. “I have and will still have” -> “I will always have”
11. many修飾可數名詞，time數不過來，而且這一句搭配也有點彆扭。
12. deeper -> further
13. “…articles, or…” 此處連接語法鏈接有問題。
……
……(shall we keep going?)
……
……
……(alright…)
……
14. knowle[d]ge不可數。
15. “I am not to study….word” 用過去時或完成時，和前一句對應。
16. expect[ation]…（以下略）
17. “everything in English” 包括了前面的幾項了，語義重複。
18. “With my”刪掉。
19. ” I have realized that [to learn] is not only to get the knowledge, but also to gain the feeling of culture. ” learning vs to get vs to gain, “doing” vs “to do”只能選一個哦。
20. reme[m]ber
21. cultur[al] background
22. I also want to learn more about English culture in my subject.
23. For this [reason, ]I will read more and more. (“more and more”… C’mon, use another phrase…)
24. What exactly is “the sightseeing university”?
25. “reading aloud, making myself fly to the western countries.” (No… this is not how you use a metaphor!! = =)(Seriously, no. Don’t put it that way.)
26. Enjoy the sunshine, the article, the happiness of learning English, and make a beautiful [trip] to everywhere in the world. How eager[ly] I expect it!
27. Read more, do [more] morning-reading, and listen more.
28. “I believe I will gain my [sense of English] which is my [biggest] target”… “in this term”放在句尾有歧義。
29. By the way, by “English culture”, you mean “the British culture” or “the American culture”?
30. You’re welcome. -______,-
當我看到這篇評論的時候我震驚了。我真的沒想到你這麼仔細的檢查並且給我回復了這篇文章的問題。我一定好好修改……謝謝。
怎能忘記署名……
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哈哈，我也來看熱鬧。
很有感情的表達。日後學成了英語，再來看看一定很有趣。我大學裡的第一篇英文習作都一直留著叻。
24. 贈你一個好詞：picturesque
「校園」有個詞：campus，用在這裡比 university 恰當。