Time goes by, I have been in International Software School of Wuhan University for my college for some days. My dream is to be a good programmer, a software architect, even aa boss of a IT company. I know it is so important to learn English for my major, for I will always have much time reading English articles, and may go to foreign countries for further study.
In high school, I have learned much English knowledge. In my opinion, I am not to study only the grammer or the word.
As for my expectation for this term, I select a word called ENJOY. So I plan to learn more than English itself. English culture, knowledge written in English language, and even everything else in English, will be my expectation.
With my growing up, I have realized that to learn is not only to get the knowledge, but also to gain the feeling of culture. I remember,when I study Chinese, I usually want to get the cultural background of the text. I also want to learn more about English culture in my subject. For this reason, I will read much more.
I want to start my morning-reading. I can not wait to sit in the picturesque university, reading aloud, making myself fly to the western countries. Enjoy the sunshine, the article, the happiness of learning English, and make a beautiful trip to everywhere in the world. How eagerly I expect it!
Read more, do more morning-reading, and listen more. I believe I will gain my sense of English which is my biggest target in this term. I will also know more about English culture.
(IT IS MY HOMEWORK FOR COLLEGE ENGLISH, EDITED WITH NAL’S HELP. THANKS)
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software architect!
怎麼了
是不是修改过，好像原来拼错了。是我看错了？
是的修改過了，修改的地方請參看你下面的評論。
你原来拼的是software architec。
是的。
check your grammar, buddy.
please tell the detail, thanks
1. expect for -> expectation of
2. in [the] new term
3. 连接两个独立的句子不应用”and”。”and”
4. “I have been in ISS of …. for my college. ” 你用现在完成时是要表达『已经有一段时间了』吗？读着好别扭。
5. a good progra[m]mer
6. architec[t], 软件工程师正规的说法是：software engineer
7. a[n] IT company
8. “good”, “boss” …推荐换用其它词汇： “professional”, “CEO” etc.
9. major已可以代表专业，”subject”删。
10. “I have and will still have” -> “I will always have”
11. many修饰可数名词，time数不过来，而且这一句搭配也有点别扭。
12. deeper -> further
13. “…articles, or…” 此处连接语法链接有问题。
……
……(shall we keep going?)
……
……
……(alright…)
……
14. knowle[d]ge不可数。
15. “I am not to study….word” 用过去时或完成时，和前一句对应。
16. expect[ation]…（以下略）
17. “everything in English” 包括了前面的几项了，语义重复。
18. “With my”删掉。
19. ” I have realized that [to learn] is not only to get the knowledge, but also to gain the feeling of culture. ” learning vs to get vs to gain, “doing” vs “to do”只能选一个哦。
20. reme[m]ber
21. cultur[al] background
22. I also want to learn more about English culture in my subject.
23. For this [reason, ]I will read more and more. (“more and more”… C’mon, use another phrase…)
24. What exactly is “the sightseeing university”?
25. “reading aloud, making myself fly to the western countries.” (No… this is not how you use a metaphor!! = =)(Seriously, no. Don’t put it that way.)
26. Enjoy the sunshine, the article, the happiness of learning English, and make a beautiful [trip] to everywhere in the world. How eager[ly] I expect it!
27. Read more, do [more] morning-reading, and listen more.
28. “I believe I will gain my [sense of English] which is my [biggest] target”… “in this term”放在句尾有歧义。
29. By the way, by “English culture”, you mean “the British culture” or “the American culture”?
30. You’re welcome. -______,-
当我看到这篇评论的时候我震惊了。我真的没想到你这么仔细的检查并且给我回复了这篇文章的问题。我一定好好修改……谢谢。
怎能忘記署名……
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哈哈，我也來看熱鬧。
很有感情的表達。日後學成了英語，再來看看一定很有趣。我大學裡的第一篇英文習作都一直留著叻。
24. 赠你一个好词：picturesque
「校園」有個詞：campus，用在這裡比 university 恰當。